According to TomTom telematics, a fleet management software solution
that connects car services to increase overall fleet productivity. The main
function of TomTom is to optimize vehicle operations with real-time vehicle
tracking capabilities to provide a more accurate location of its current
position and the upcoming roads ahead. It also consists of a online system to
review the driver’s productivity within a day to help reduce the manpower
needed for future operations to better manage the fleet. TomTom also helps the
driver to keep an eye on the road with an installed device that manages driving
behavior and receives active driving feedback on speeding and harsh braking. With
the increasing amount of carbon footprints, TomTom provides real-time fuel consumption
information that will be taken into feedback to help lower carbon dioxide emission.
TomTom remains as one of the leading dedicated telematics solution with a cloud
based system (Webfleet) that provides detailed driving behavior for drivers
to analyze their own performance and for companies to compare it over time to
dramatically improve efficiency and lower operational cost.
TomTom Telematics. (n.d.) Fleet Management Reporting. Retrieved from https://telematics.tomtom.com/en_gb/webfleet/products/webfleet/reporting/
Dear Junhui,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this well-informed and concise summary on TomTom Telematics. We feel that you have brought across the product description rather clear. However, there are some points that we have pointed out which you may want to look out for.
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- "The main function of TomTom...." should be "TomTom Telematics instead because they are two different sectors.
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- "upcoming roads ahead" can be written as "traffic situation".
- Grammatical error: "consists of a (an) online system"
- Missing punctuation: "It also consists of a online system to review the driver’s productivity within a day to help reduce the manpower needed (,) for future operations to better manage the fleet."
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- Missing punctuation: "TomTom also helps the driver to keep an eye on the road with an installed device (,) that manages driving behavior and receives active driving feedback on speeding and harsh braking."
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- Paragraphing at "...feedback on speeding and harsh braking. (Start a new paragraph here) With the increasing amount of carbon footprints, TomTom provides real-time fuel consumption..."
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- Word usage: "consumption information that will be taken into feedback (consideration) to help lower..."
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- Grammatical error: "TomTom remains as one of the leading dedicated telematics solution (s) with a cloud..."
- Sentence too long: "TomTom remains as one of the leading dedicated telematics solution with a cloud based system (Webfleet) that (not only) provides detailed driving behavior for drivers to analyze their own performance and (, but also) for companies to compare it over time to dramatically improve efficiency and lower operational cost.
Apart from these, we feel that you could have used some transitional words in your summary such as "In addition, "Moreover, etc. to bridge your ideas, making it more relatable to one another.
Thank you and keep up the good work!
Cheers,
Yingquan and Germain